lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
關於樂樂改寫，這個也是個很好的教程，首先你可以學習到改寫，並且能改出很好的文章。
其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！

自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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8 y8 [3 T4 a$ o$ _- M, pBecause of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.
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5 K0 }( a9 d0 U# x3 \6 d8 F$ EBecause of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.

這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
5 z7 U5 `$ M6 f, e( H9 y0 D你看，我稍微加一個單詞
6 L5 ]3 m( b6 R9 NBecause of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
) |' @" l6 k+ `3 C就自然了。

aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
我來給你說說吧！
# @, `$ g: u3 F$ ?$ w5 w3 {首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

原文：
8 E  _  q! s9 eIf needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.

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! N& x+ Z% Z1 v2 [) B+ V" ^  GYou can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
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同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
) d, N$ v4 E+ `2 x0 N  n0 `/ z樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
稍微加一點料
! m* ?6 ]$ A, k1 [You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
就再次變得自然了

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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
/ x3 z! f0 p! t1 Y3 hBecause of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

原文：
2 I; |. S" K6 l* }+ U( L& iHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.
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學員改寫：
: W! q1 Z9 L9 V1 twhat baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.
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6 b0 H  a  R6 `- sA can keep B from doing C
' g$ M; e9 B. F5 `+ rA = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
" f! Q- F- p! p. k) _B = the baby's head
doing C = rolling around during transport

6 y" h7 X# ]2 o6 N+ [' O但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
What we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.
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這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。

樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

9 d$ J  a9 Q  t4 _* n是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。

樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
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Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。

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