lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
' R  \9 X3 {5 k: Y) y4 ^首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
3 r5 }' Q6 y" y5 b6 j& D: mDofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
) S) z7 h. j) \關於樂樂改寫，這個也是個很好的教程，首先你可以學習到改寫，並且能改出很好的文章。
其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
5 B  \2 K- l% w: g( ~Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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8 [6 R# n. z# x$ S: h( fBecause of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.
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Because of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
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這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
- I. O" U0 O4 p/ _. ?因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
% s3 J* ]! H! B3 D" Z  D4 c你看，我稍微加一個單詞
+ V7 n/ f& u) Z, l/ RBecause of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
' x  R* `) m+ M9 t( x就自然了。
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aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
我來給你說說吧！
( ~" w* z) G( X" |首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

原文：
If needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.

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6 k& J9 x. ^% u7 q4 jYou can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
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同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
( K0 @* r( `" K& i他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
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: p3 \9 e7 [7 pYou can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
就再次變得自然了
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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( O% T% ^* Y% s/ f9 s2 l7 o$ ]) r) g) hHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.
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  E0 Q" y' r1 \2 o2 ~( X( C; ^6 q9 Y8 ^what baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.
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; U# U5 O) B2 ?$ R  q. }4 F- ]3 ^/ h這裡屬於原文稍微難一點，因為較長
7 N% ?( H( A$ `6 k- |A can keep B from doing C
A = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
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doing C = rolling around during transport
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8 P9 E+ }: [# r, d& X! e- h但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
What we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.

7 N+ |& M! a* [8 Y! m2 e9 b" A這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。
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樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

! F; n' I" d( W" y那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
/ l) G+ e' R% Y# x那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

2 h* R. I6 H2 F) l1 \0 p0 X是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。
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樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
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& w4 l; ]3 q2 x$ T; O( N6 E+ U* NHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。
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