lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
  v: _, C: g5 b0 e' Y首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
7 x# l; a. U/ A1 x( K2 pDofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
8 f' ^' V6 v0 b2 Y; O8 G/ ^關於樂樂改寫，這個也是個很好的教程，首先你可以學習到改寫，並且能改出很好的文章。
其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
0 x; W& Y3 @/ J  W2 n) W  E' qBecause of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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, b6 ^* Y9 n( `2 D9 s# rBecause of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.
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9 `, |2 b  l' W- n+ {  Y7 E  HBecause of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.

9 v6 Y' D5 t0 \$ [' u8 O# u這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
! I- j+ c- [* j3 M6 R因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
# H+ M* J3 |5 p8 }你看，我稍微加一個單詞
! n' j9 P% z0 j& Q. EBecause of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
就自然了。
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aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
$ b3 p* W. ^& y9 k4 K+ \5 {Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

原文：
If needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.

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You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
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同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
稍微加一點料
You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
% a, F" V1 ~" h: Y8 o( ?就再次變得自然了
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.

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3 s; F  U( C8 C% m: ~+ mwhat baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.
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! f5 r1 p- O# c2 _) v這裡屬於原文稍微難一點，因為較長
/ X' Z& b2 M) @2 Q& K- CA can keep B from doing C
* z; N( U/ A$ W0 M6 t* r. U! l% HA = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
B = the baby's head
doing C = rolling around during transport

& w) n* m+ T: E1 j' E" ?但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
What we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.

這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。
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樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

% C+ G1 O" f! `- j那不是只用付lelegai呢。。
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a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

  p1 n$ n8 q9 b) u& x是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。

樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
原文：
Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

; b: D7 L3 N- [  {9 b) n哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。

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